hmpf: the ears of love (ears of love)
Two and a half years ago I had the bright idea of revising some of my oldest stories that I liked in principle, but not in execution. I asked fabulous Highlander fic writer [livejournal.com profile] amonitrate for help, which she provided. I got about halfway through revising the stupidly titled Sometimes We Believe, got stuck, and promptly sort of forgot about it.

Well, today I felt like *finishing* something for a change, and since nothing else I'm working on is close to finishing at the moment, I decided to give the old story another try. And I think this is about as good as I can make it, or rather, it is as good as I can be *bothered* to make it, now. I don't want to invest any more time and energy in this; I have too many other writing projects that I care more about.

This was my second story (as in: second story, ever). It was written for a Highlander Lyric Wheel in August 2000, I think. Any traces of the Lyric Wheel song have been removed, however. I should probably run this version by [livejournal.com profile] amonitrate or some other native speaker again, but to be honest, I just want it off my to do list, and also, I feel it would be a bit ridiculous to bother [livejournal.com profile] amonitrate with it again, after two and a half years. So, instead of sending it to anyone in particular, I put my hope in the collective constructive crit forces of my flist. (Not that I'm not aware of a lot of the problems already; some of them are structural and I'm completely stumped as to how to fix them. Anyway, if you have suggestions...)

Well, here we go:

Title: Sometimes We Believe
Fandom: Highlander
Characters: Methos, Kronos, Silas, Caspian, OC
Rating: R-17
Summary: Some jobs require a certain amount of fanatism.
Thanks to: [livejournal.com profile] exorcizo_te, who was this story's first beta, many a year ago. [livejournal.com profile] amonitrate, who was its second beta, somewhat more recently, though still a few years ago. Heh.
Note: Is the Watchers' plan stupid in the extreme? Yes. You got a better one? *g*

This way to the Bronze Age )

Whoah.

May. 10th, 2007 02:20 am
hmpf: Me painted blue (fanatic)
I just finished revising "Names", mainly because it's a bit easier than revising "68 Wives" (probably because I care about it slightly less *g*), and when I moved that, with a great feeling of satisfaction, to the 'finished' folder in my 'writing' file, I decided to poke around a bit in that folder.

The 'finished' folder contains a folder for every story I've finished so far (that's 14), and those folders contain all the earlier, 'in progress' versions of those stories. So I took a look at the very first incarnation of what is now "Normal", but was then titled "Coming Home", and, whoah. It's craptastic!

I'm quite impressed with myself for having turned that pile of crap into "Normal". Even if it did take me three years.

Will post both "Names" and the final version of "Starving On the Jump Down" (yay for pretentious fic titles stolen from German humorists!) in the next couple of days. Just need to get them formatted for my website.

Then, I'll finish revising "68 Wives" and the also very pretentiously/stupidly titled *very* early Methos fic "Sometimes We Believe" (my second story, from way back in 2000), and *then* I'll get back to my many works in progress. Wheeeee!
hmpf: the ears of love (ears of love)
"Epilogue" is down to 1698 words now. Was: 2128. That's 430 words cut, or roughly 20 percent.

(@ Scapekid: yes, sometimes you need a machete. Oh yes.)
hmpf: the ears of love (ears of love)
So I promised myself that I would make space for writing in my life again, but I'm not always in the mood to really write something fresh. Instead I've decided to revise my older stuff when I'm too tired to write something new. Started revising my second Lyric Wheel story today, 'Sometimes We Believe' (the very first one won't get revised but will be left unchanged as a monument to my very humble beginnings as a fanfic writer). Well, it's certainly an interesting experience because 'revising' mainly seems to consist of cutting stuff out for now. It's 12 pages long at the moment, but I expect it will be a lot shorter by the time I'm done.

I think partly this is just the lazy way to revise - don't think too long about a sentence that bothers you; cut it out. On the other hand I have this tendency to remove stuff from earlier drafts all the time, and the tendency has only gotten more pronounced recently. I can't tell you how many pages I removed from 'Normal', all told. And I think 'Normal' is all the better for it, even if I do feel a certain nostalgia for certain missing sentences or paragraphs. But, even if you're utterly in love with a certain sentence - if it doesn't work in the place or for the character you used it for: get rid of it. Keep it for some other story if you must, but don't leave it where it only hinders the flow or results in OOCness.

Also... I'm not sure that, considering how old this story is and how much I have changed since then, I should be doing anything more invasive than editing it a bit. Sure, there are bits I would write completely differently now. But the story is part of my own writing history, and I don't want to falsify that too much. I don't really want to turn it into a different story than it was intended to be at the time.

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