I hate poetry

[hmpf]

á à à á à áà? (7)

áà. áàà. (5)

à à á á à á, (6)
á áàà à á, (6)
áà á áà, (5)
áà, (2)
á á à, (3)
-- á. (1)

á à à á à áà? (7)

à á, áà á (5)
á à á áà á, (6)
á à á à à á, áà á á, (6 + 4 = 10)
à áà á à á à à á. (9)
á à áà; (4)
áááárrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrgh

Comments

[beccatoria.livejournal.com]

I'm not certain this is a constructive way to deconstruct your poem when you're not going for absolute adherence to a syllabic/stress/intonation pattern?

Especially since the words themselves will affect how those beats run together, in a more complex relationship than merely stress-unstress-this-many-to-a-word, because the sounds of those words matter?

Still...I sympathise. ;)

That's why I gave up halfway through.

[hmpf.livejournal.com]

I was just trying another avenue of getting a handle on why the second stanza bothers me.