I think that when the music changes at 0:25 you need to change something visually. This is a whole different section musically, and staying on the blue sky feels like we're being left behind. Even zooming in or out would work.
I adore the lights/door thing from 0:55.
At 1:21, you need to either take out the first clip of the naked girl or stay on it longer.
At 3:06 I feel that "Let's roll the dice just one more time" stays a little too long on that shot of the guy reaching for the gun.
I don't know the context, but 3:22 doesn't seem like a very "Don't wanna die" shot to me. I've never seen the show though!
Anyway, these are just my impressions. I really really like this vid. I am very impressed. It's got strong narrative coherency and good use of external movement. I hope you fix those stutters, and I can't wait to see the finished product. It's already better than the vast majority of stuff out there.
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Date: 2006-04-27 09:36 am (UTC)I think that when the music changes at 0:25 you need to change something visually. This is a whole different section musically, and staying on the blue sky feels like we're being left behind. Even zooming in or out would work.
I adore the lights/door thing from 0:55.
At 1:21, you need to either take out the first clip of the naked girl or stay on it longer.
At 3:06 I feel that "Let's roll the dice just one more time" stays a little too long on that shot of the guy reaching for the gun.
I don't know the context, but 3:22 doesn't seem like a very "Don't wanna die" shot to me. I've never seen the show though!
Anyway, these are just my impressions. I really really like this vid. I am very impressed. It's got strong narrative coherency and good use of external movement. I hope you fix those stutters, and I can't wait to see the finished product. It's already better than the vast majority of stuff out there.