Rewriting...
Jun. 21st, 2006 12:48 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
hmpfSometimes We Believe, which, arrgh, looks worse every time I look at it. ![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
amonitrate's comments are a lot of help, though. But it's tough going. Oh so tough. I still think there's a good story lurking somewhere in that mess, otherwise I wouldn't go to all this trouble. But it *is* such a mess. What makes this so difficult is that it's mostly characterisation that needs fixing. And it's *Horsemen* characterisation. I'm not good at getting into the heads of immortal mass murderers. I'm not good at getting into the head of someone as old, cunning, and twisted as Horseman Methos.
Arrgh.
amonitrate's comments are a lot of help, though. But it's tough going. Oh so tough. I still think there's a good story lurking somewhere in that mess, otherwise I wouldn't go to all this trouble. But it *is* such a mess. What makes this so difficult is that it's mostly characterisation that needs fixing. And it's *Horsemen* characterisation. I'm not good at getting into the heads of immortal mass murderers. I'm not good at getting into the head of someone as old, cunning, and twisted as Horseman Methos. Arrgh.
