Rephrasing my question

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I am interested in opinions from people who aren't medical professionals or 'medical geeks'. I'd like to get at least *one* opinion from one such person, because at the moment I'm really worried that I was being a bit too obscure in my fic.

Heck, you don't even have to be a LoM fan - if you can spare a few moments, I'd be thrilled if you could have a quick look at this and tell me if you got what the abbreviations in the last part were about, essentially. I think it should be possible to extrapolate this from the context - but then, I'm the author, so I can't trust my own judgment on this. The ficlet is only 652 words, so it shouldn't take much time. I'm not after general feedback, and I'm certainly not fishing for compliments - I just want to make sure I'm communicating clearly enough before I release this story to a wider audience.

(Original question here.)

Comments

[elliejane.livejournal.com]

Heya :) Thought I'd reply to your query, though I may have invalidated my response by reading the question, lol.

I didn't recognise any of the medical acronyms, none of them registered as medical BUT then again I am not a very well versed person in even your average medical drama. I THINK that Sam's ref to the HRCT scan, would lead me to back track to the other letters and go, oh, that's what they must be, BUT I did that knowing (from your question) that that is what they were.

From my point of view maybe a couple that are more obvious would be a good thing. Not all of them though, because you are wanting to be subtle and not use a sledgehammer to get your concept across!

As to what WOULD be more obvious? Um, the only thing I can think of off the top of my head is ECG...electrocardiogram. And ICU, as Intensive care Unit. IV as Intravenous.

Sorry not to be more help. If it's any consolation, I really, really liked the fic. I'm not much of a LoM person, and it took me to almost the end to remember/realise that it was an Annie pov! But that didn't stop me thinking the writing was great!