re: flag: I may have to revise that line, then. Hmm.

>I can see him smiling so proudly at himself over that last line. *grin*

Haha! The last line makes me cringe *so* much!

(Although I think it actually could be an effective last line if the lead-up to it was more skillfully done. There's good pathos and bad pathos, and it *would* be possible to get some good pathos out of this.)

Eeeek! Gotta run!